Can someone please re-phrase these 2 sentences so they can make sense?

There was no sound, apart from the sound of Mona’s boots and heavy rain, both clashing on the pavement.





There was no light, apart from the light of the moon which would look down upon the earth with its fellow stars by its side.

Can someone please re-phrase these 2 sentences so they can make sense?
There were no sounds apart from the clashing of Mona's boots and heavy rain on the pavement, and no light, except from the moon and its fellow stars looking down upon the earth.
Reply:Besides Mona's boots and the heavy rain clashing on the pavement, there was no sound.





There was no light, except the light of the moon, which looks down upon the earth with its fellow stars by its side.
Reply:how about


with only the sound of her footsteps and the pounding rain piercing the utter silence, Mona wandered through the treacherous storm, as she struggled to see the sidewalk with what little moon light there was to guide her.


how was that?
Reply:The street was quiet, except for the sound of the heavy rain and Mona's boots on the pavement. The only illumination was moonlight and starlight.
Reply:Except for the sound of Mona's boots and the heavy rain clashing on the pavement, there was no sound.
Reply:The only sound besides Mona's boots was the heavy rain clashing on the pavement.





Only the light of the moon looked down on the earth with the stars beside it.
Reply:Aside for the sound of Mona's boots clashing on the pavement through the heavy rain, there was no other sound.








The only light was form the moon which would look down upon the earth with its fellow stars by its side.
Reply:There's a lot of things you could do with these. Depends on what is framed around it. Whenever you come to a point like this, think of it like a photo, what frames it, what is it supported by, and where will you hang it. For instance with the first sentence. Is she thinking?


~ Her mind was already clouded. Her thoughs as harsh as her heels scuffing the concrete. Her body felt like concrete, rough, heavy, walked on.


Is she sad?


~ The rain was of no help. The sound of her boots pounding on the grounds surface in perfect timing with the rain drug her down even more. She hated rain.


Is somone following her?


~ She was perfect, her stride, her body, everything. The rain made her look untouchable, falling all around her, the steady pace of her heels agains the sidewalk making her stand out from his dreams. Making her real. If she was real he could touch her, hold her, smell her. He could have her.





You cant have sound and silence at the same time. For instance "Aside from the sound of monas boots it was silent" It's not silent. . . there is sound. You can interupt silence or break it but you can't have both .





See....it all depends on the "frame"


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Reply:The sound of the heavy rain against Mona's boots clashed with the pavement's.


The sister moon looked on the fellow stars by her side, as they shown on mother earth in an artless light.
Reply:The only sounds were Mona's boots and the heavy rain, clashing on the pavement.





The moon,looking down upon the earth with its consort stars by its side, was the only light.
Reply:Apart from the rhythmical sound of Mona’s boots meshing with the heavy rain on the pavement, there was a blissful silence.





The ally was dark, and if not for the glare of the moon which looked down upon the earth with its fellow stars by its side, there would be no light.
Reply:Apart from the sound of Mona's boots and the heavy rain clashing on the pavement, there was no sound.








The light of the moon and stars peered down at the Earth, on the otherwise seemingly dark night (or sky).
Reply:Only the sound of Mona's boots and the heavy rain clashing on the pavement could be heard.








The only light was that of the moon and its fellow stars shining down upon the earth.



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